Thou Shalt Not Kill [Legendary Challenge]

You've waited a long time for this grade, and for that I apologize. Your fight with Daichi, tragically cut short as it was closing out, is a rather fun one including some solid creativity from both partners. In addition, your OOC note sections could easily serve as an efficient and effective "how to" in our mechanics system for new players. That doesn't really factor into the grade, but I wanted to be sure to direct anyone seeing this review to check into those to see exactly what I'm talking about. You really did some really notch instruction there.

On to the actual grading, you do a good job setting this up in your solo thread with Lucas' father. Though Daichi and Lucas have never met before and, as such, there's no long standing relationship to consider here, Lucas has some very clearly rooted beliefs about the question of the Shinigami. You set the table with the description of the actual event which leads your confrontation, but I could have personally done with a little more conversation, either in or out of combat.

As for the actual writing, you did a damned good job. You expanded things which Daichi wrote about as second nature to his character into something that made not only Lucas' moves but also his opponent's seem cool and powerful. More than once you added some extra flavor to Daichi's actions that really helped sell him as a credible opponent for Lucas.

It's unfortunate that this thread didn't get to go on any longer, something I touched on in your milestone grade. The ending, though appropriate, doesn't really go as far for character development as a few more rounds could have. Though there's no big change in Lucas as regards his stance on Shinigami, he does come close. There's internal strife there and I really think some of that could have either been expanded upon or maybe even moved into something more of an actual realization with a little more back and forth.

100 for Setting the Stage
150 for Character Development
200 for Choreography/Writing/Cool Factor

Total GP: 450!

You two are largely fighting because you're in the same place at the same time with different philosophies, but you do a damn fine job of setting the stage for this inevitable clash with someone, particularly in your solo thread. Lucas proves himself unwilling to provoke the wrath of the Seireitei by going for the killing blow, and his closing words indicate his intentions quite clearly. Your writing quality is what really shines here. You elevated not only Lucas, but also his opponent. Being able to sell a foe you should realistically have no problem beating as a legitimate threat is more writers need to employ, and this serves as a very good demonstration of that. I initially balked at giving north of 350 GP for an abandoned thread when I first saw this request, but this really does rise beyond that level.